this is Nancy. You actually helped me on that assignment. the instructor did not provide specific information I will e-mail you the assignment and copy and paste his comments
Your paper (excluding the title page and references) is 2 pages long. It is considered appropriate. You also have two citations, both are from SAMSHA. It is considered not really sufficient to have only 2 citations.
There are a few major problem in this paper:
1) You should divide the paper into different sub-segment as indicated, such as: Description of the issue; Purpose of the study; Significance of the study; Data set to be used for data analysis. You open the paper with introduction of SAMSHA studies, without even explain drug abuse is a problems or lack of treatment facilities is a main issues. There should be some more general opening statement about "description of the issues"
2) What is the significance of the study? After reading your paper a few times, I still cannot see it (or at least, it is not described clearly)
3) The same, what is the purpose of the study? You have a data, you write a lot about this data. However, I am not sure what is your research plan with this dataset.
Dependent variables: (Types of) treatment facilities, I assumed.
Independent variables: Unclear -
Content: 54 (It is definitely only in "fair" category. Many required parts are missing, or buried under your description of SAMSHA study)
Writing: 25 (Your writing is fine. However, with only 2 citations - and both are about the dataset you will use- It is not as described as in the rubric as "Paper contains multiple, appropriate and exemplary sources expected/required for the assignment." to be considered excellent.)
i need a hypothesis, i guess with all the corrections he mentioned