Would you please review the letter below and let me know if any changes are needed?
Greetings! I am Heli Xu , and an applicant of TIER 4 (general) student visa. However, unfortunately I mMy application was refused under paragraph 320 (7(A) of the immigration rules. Here Pplease allow me to apply for an administrate review and explain to you my situation.
Based on the rejection letter, the birth certificate included in the Visa application was false document. This document was obtained by my mother. Initially, she did not know the proper process of how to obtain this document. Therefore, she went to the local hospital for consultation. The staff member, name XXXX, advised my mother that he could provide an official birth certificate for the purpose of obtaining student VISA to study abroad. My mother trusted him and paid him the required amount 300 Yuan and received this birth certificate. To our best knowledge at the time when we submitted the VISA application, we thought this was a valid document. To our surprise, we received this rejection letter. My mother and I went back to the hospital on Oct 22, 2011, and spoke to the same staff member, and told him that my VISA was rejected because of the false document he provided. Again, he restated that the document he issued was an official document. Enclosed is a written note by him provided his contact information for verification purpose. However, a day later, he called back to our family, informed us that he talked to his national office and lawyer and found out the document was indeed invalid. Enclosed is another letter from him to clarify the mistake was caused by his misunderstanding. He sincerely apologized for his administrative error. The correct document should be a notarized document. Subsequently, we obtained the enclosed official notarized birth certificate on Oct 23, 2011. With the facts above, I believe this was a honest mistake. I did not tender any known inaccurate documentation. Would you please reconsider my VISA application? In my visa application I submitted my Birth Certificate to support my relationship with my mother. However I didn't falsify my document intentionally and I suspect I was cheated by the hospital. Since I didn't have a birth certificate when I was born in 1988, I have to re-apply for one in the hospital which I was born. I told them my situation and they answered me that they have the authority to reissue my certificate. I got my Birth Certificate after I paid 300 yuan fees. I never thought it could be a falsified document because I did went to the specific hospital and the related department in it, and I never doubt their qualification. I was quite surprised with the ECO Comment "Checks conducted by this office with Xinyang Maternal & Children's Healthcare Hospital have revealed this to be falsified. When the hospital department was contacted they verified the Birth Certificate was not genuine and NO. C410144799 does not exist." So I went to the hospital again and query them after I received my refusal. They insisted my certificate is valid and I was confused and cannot understand.
After I checked some laws I found that in my situation I could offer another certificate to prove my birth. And here the new document is in attachment. I hope it will help in your judgment.
On the other side, I have contacted with Lancaster University (email address) and they agreed to extend my entrance date to 6th November. I prepared years to apply for Lancaster University and I am almost there. After almost 30 days (15 working days) anxious waiting for my visa, the result is so disappointing and. mMy motherm wept in tears because she felt terrible that her innocent help wealmost ruined my future.pt immediately when she knew it. But now I have to behave like a man but not a son, and I will show her confidence and hope. After my reading the refusal of entry clearance carefully, I decide to apply for an administrate review since I didn't falsify my document intentionally. Had I swear if I knew it was a invalidfalsified document I would have never offered it to you.
I am so sorry to takingfor the many troubles in my application and here I . I sincerely appreciate beg your your reconsideration of my application under my explanation and the new documents enclosed as support. And II support. I will be quite appreciated for your help and looking for your reply.