My name isXXXXX'm a licensed attorney. Glad to try and help out.
Sure sorry for the circumstances, truly. My heart goes out to you.
I apologize for the technical issues and greatly appreciate your patience!
Just by way of a few introductory remarks, I must say you folks have done a great job here overall. I mentioned your passion in my initial post, and that's truly what comes through loud and clear. I commend you for being willing to take a proactive stance and step up to the plate, so to speak. You're doing a favor for any other folks similarly situated, and I have utmost respect for you in doing so.
Also, just to briefly touch upon my background and experience, I've been involved in the substantive drafting of governmental petitions. I've also served as a legal editor and consultant, so I tend to have an eagle eye when it comes to proofreading. I mention all of that just by way of background, not meaning to brag by any means, but this sort of thing does happen to be right up my alley.
So, having said all of that, here are my thoughts regarding your working draft as it currently stands. My comments or suggestions are in underlined italic font, as follows:
Petition to His Excellency the Right Honourable David, Governor General of Canada We the undersigned, citizens of Canada, respectfully XXXXX XXXXX grievances and urgently pray for the attention of the Governor General to the following most serious causes for genuine alarm: THAT, Whereas the Prime Minister of Canada, Mr. Stephen, was found guilty of the parliamentary offense of Contempt of Parliament on March 25th, 2011, and has continued in this pattern of undemocratic and unconstitutional behavior as demonstrated by the following, to wit: Secretly drafting and refusing debate on the Canada/ China F.I.P.P.A) Foreign Investment Promotion and Protection Act), which violates both the Canadian constitution (including but not limited to the Charter of Rights and Freedoms), and the United Nations Declaration of the Rights of Indigenous Peoples (herein after referred to as U.N.D.R.I.P. to which Canada is signatory. Under this Act, it will be illegal for Canadians to peacefully assemble outside any China owned corporation inside Canada. This will also make it illegal for Canadian citizens whether indigenous or not to express their conscience over any economical or environmental violation to our lands. (This is in direct violation of our Chartered rights under section 2 of the Canadian Charter of Rights and Freedoms). Furthermore, this enactment would constitute an conscionable deprivation of our Constitutional rights and risk setting an exceptionally dangerous precedent. Truly, the horrendous potential impact of this Act cannot be overstated as touches upon the lives of Canadian citizens. The unilateral imposition of Bill C-45, which also violates U.N.D.R.I.P as well as the Canadian constitution. (On Nov. 21st, 2012 an open letter was sent to Prime Minister Stephen Harper from several groups expressing disappointment at the way the government had chosen to “rewrite some of Canada’s foundational environmental protection laws” with Bill C-45. The signatories to the letter — including the David Suzuki Foundation, Greenpeace Canada, and World Wildlife Fund — allege that Bill C-45 “weakens Canada’s environmental laws,” removes critical safeguards, and limits public involvement in projects that could threaten the “air, water, soil and ecosystems on which all Canadians, and our economy, depend).” These two examples of disregard for the Constitution and democratic process clearly illustrate the need for intervention to preserve the fabric of Canadian society. We witness Canada's First Nations rising in resistance to this sabotage of enshrined treaty rights and trust. With all due respect for the rule of law, the Constitution and democratic process must be the foundation of our government, of which you act as vice regal. In the words of Jacques Monet: "The Queen, the Governor General and the Lieutenant Governors are the custodians of the constitution. Their responsibility is to see that the rules are followed, both the written and the unwritten". THEREFORE, Your petitioners call on you to act in your capacity as Governor General and the Queen’s representative to exercise your powers to prorogue Parliament, recuse Stephen and allow the electorate to speak.
I would also recommend placing "vice regal" in upper and lower case letters (Vice Regal). Furthermore, I do like the language you shared in the input from others, namely (in pertinent part): "..."the failure to duly consult and obtain free and informed consent of First Nations as legally required under Section 35(?) of the Constitution". I would add for reference that the specific provision to be cited is "Sections 35(1)-(4)" (Section 34 starts the portions to be cited as the Canadian Charter of Rights and Freedoms).
I hope all of that makes sense. The botXXXXX XXXXXne is you have a solid document here which nicely expresses your position.
If you have a follow-up question or need clarification, please just say the word by using "reply" to reach me.
I truly hope all works out for you good folks.